Opening to Thriller film - Revision of final concept

Unfortunately, the use of the empty shipping containers in our thriller film has had to be changed because they are now locked - we have no way of using these containers so myself and Austen have revised the opening and have came up with a slightly different idea. The start of the opening to the thriller film is exactly the same but we have changed the ending slightly.

The plot:

A boy will stop for a drink of water outside a shipping container located just outside a park. The boy walks down a long path away from the vanishing point before coming across the shipping container and stopping for a rest. Then, from nowhere, a mysterious older man enters the scene and slams the boy’s head against the shipping container and he drops to the floor. We see mysterious older man drag the boy around the corner of the shipping container.

That’s the cliff hanger. The enigma is who is the mysterious older man? Where did he come from? Is the boy conscious or possibly dead? What will happen next?

Revision of the thriller opening:

Shot 1) The camera pans down from the sky to a long shot which shows a vanishing point - the vanishing point is towards the end of the long pathway. A boy of around 16 years old walks down the pathway, away from the vanishing point, towards the camera. Me and Austen thought this would be a great shot - it was inspired by the ending scene of the 1949 film, ‘The Third Man’.

Shot 2) Pan shot of boy walking down long pathway with vanishing point.

Shot 3) The boy stops for a break outside a shipping container and takes a drink out of his bag - there is a close up of him drinking some water.

Shot 4) From nowhere, a mysterious older man walks into the shot and slams the boys head against the shipping container - the boy drops down on the floor (a series of close up shots will be used here to show suspense and the use of clever camera angles will stop anybody from getting hurt during filming).

Shot 5) There are more close up shots of the mysterious older man dragging the unconscious or even dead boy round the corner - at this point, the audience do not know whether the boy is alive.

Note: at the exact moment we see the boy dragged round the corner, our opening scene will cut to a black screen where the titles of the film will fade in.